Love, After

[matsunosuperfan]

Now I understand 'hand over glass' (not a party person!) I find nothing wrong here. Nice poem. Any changes would to my mind be purely a matter of individual idiosyncrasy and it's so direct and condensed I'd hate to over-analyse (which would mean making it what it wasn't). I never forget the earnest creative writing student who told Robert Graves "Mr. Graves, poetry isn't to be enjoyed - it's to be analysed". I enjoyed this one.

It was so hard for me to keep my mouth shut and not explain, waiting to see if it worked for anyone. I think the most concerning is bunx relating it to car windows, causing confusion. I might have gone there myself, gonna think on it. Thanks for coming back, glad you enjoyed it.

We're collectively un-aging ourselves, or something. It's a known idiom, if less common these days... do with that what you will. I actually think it works and our crits, including mine, reflect more personal ignorance than an objective failure of the language.