Yesterday, 10:48 AM
(Yesterday, 10:40 AM)matsunosuperfan Wrote:would it have been that difficult to put the qafiya in? I am not going to mention the drifting mirage the radif should be rather than just state the object blankly like a concrete bollard. I feel like it wouldn't take a lot of work to make it more an actual ghazal(Yesterday, 05:07 AM)Luckieman Wrote: I personally find the blank lines in the middle of ideas distracting. Can you explain their function here? Then perhaps I can comment further.Luckie, thanks for reading, it is ostensibly a ghazal