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[matsunosuperfan]

Thanks to everyone!
I can't find any substitute for 'quietly' yet but instead of the cliche

  into eternal night.

how about

  into the nettled mold.

I think your poem will really come to life once you discipline the voice to abandon the intrusion of this mildly grandiose vernacular. "descend" feels Romantic in a way I resist. But now we're taste-making, I suppose. :3