So Now It’s Official (senryu)
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(09-17-2026, 09:52 PM)dukealien Wrote:  So Now It’s Official (senryu)

“Male, female, other?”
HR asked me. “Idiot!”
I answered; she typed.
Damn these little poems draw me in.

Technically it is a senryu as it examines human nature. I'll treat the title as a footnote or an aside so I don't have to mention that senryu shouldn't have titles, but it's fine as the ku still works without it.

There is a possible ambiguity in this, in the sense of , is the narrator calling themselves an "idiot" or HR. I presume that because of "I answered" that the narrator is calling themselves or else you would have said "I replied".

This said... I see 'she typed' as unnecessary perhaps. I doesn't seem to add anything 

could it be something like --

“Male, female, other?”
HR asked me. I sighed back,
"I'm an idiot!"

Cheers for the read.
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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Messages In This Thread
So Now It’s Official (senryu) - by dukealien - 09-17-2026, 09:52 PM
RE: So Now It’s Official (senryu) - by CRNDLSM - 09-17-2026, 10:00 PM
RE: So Now It’s Official (senryu) - by busker - 09-18-2026, 07:33 PM
RE: So Now It’s Official (senryu) - by Magpie - Yesterday, 08:30 PM



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