34 minutes ago
Thanks, matsun
I did indeed lose the line in fumbling with my phone as I typed
In the updated edit - shown as struck out lines ans green text (the last line has been recovered too) I have lost the “and her wand of” nonsense. I liked the wand / hand rhyme but it’s too much fluff.
This I think looks better - at least for now!!!
It is tempting to slip in a “sleep” somewhere, but I shall resist
I did indeed lose the line in fumbling with my phone as I typed
In the updated edit - shown as struck out lines ans green text (the last line has been recovered too) I have lost the “and her wand of” nonsense. I liked the wand / hand rhyme but it’s too much fluff.
This I think looks better - at least for now!!!
It is tempting to slip in a “sleep” somewhere, but I shall resist