Today, 12:26 AM
revisiting this - it's nice how clean the poem is, but we could use more movement. the middle two stanzas basically are just a list of musical terms. the closing gesture I still think is really strong and provocative. it deserves better setup.
maybe the speaker could disclose just a smidge more context about the subject? although, it's kind of effective how "she" is just like, the embodiment of One Singing and little else. hmm.
maybe the speaker could disclose just a smidge more context about the subject? although, it's kind of effective how "she" is just like, the embodiment of One Singing and little else. hmm.