One piece epic intro test

[CRNDLSM]

Exploding from the barrel, Luffy's stretchy
rubber arms plow through Alvira's pirate 
henchmen, terrifying them. But Koby,
her young slave, amazed, gives food to this
new kid, whose only mission is
to be the 'King of Pirates!' Shouting,  laughing, 
jabbing him about not following 
his own dreams, coward Koby watches Luffy
pound Alvira's crew to smithereens,
inspiring him to join Marines.

If I were to express a concern it is that the lines seem measured out like lengths of wood rather than planned which gives it the feeling of a prose poem chopped at regular intervals

ngl I've heard this crit a few different places on this forum now and it rarely feels like a legitimate note to me. there are tons of highly lauded contemporary poems, many of which are even good, that have this same feeling. I don't see why it should matter.

siken, for example - lines consistently broken to fit shape, no sensibility implied.

In this case, hes right about it seeming like prose, every 8 syllables is a rhyming couplet, so for me I appreciate his concern, I don't know if I can truly continue this as an epic but I'm gonna try a few more, I think as it goes on, the form will become more evident, it's an experiment entirely so I appreciate the conversation here.  Thanks for helping, everyone!