07-04-2026, 04:21 AM
(07-03-2026, 09:51 PM)dukealien Wrote: ConEd, eh? Localizing...yes - good callout
Can't help wondering how Ghost finances its charitable contributions. Fencing stuff has a high overhead.
Other than that, good character-building on here.
Because this is adapted from a screenplay where the action can take place of a lot of the words, I have to make choices when writing it as prose so I am trying to walk the line between telling too much and forgetting to cover areas that were covered by the screenplay format.
Thanks for reading