The grand themes
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(5 hours ago)busker Wrote:  
(6 hours ago)wasellajam Wrote:  
(8 hours ago)busker Wrote:  The grand themes 

Oh, the grand themes -
they’re all grand themes
about capitalism and Adam’s curse.
I don’t know which is worse -
reading poetry on grand themes,
or the heat death of the universe.

Give me Saturday’s green island dreams 
about dinosaurs, and an audiobook on Musk.
Let the great expostulate on their great themes,
from tech bros to Trump, and Donald Tusk.
I am happy to be bran, the merest husk
of greatness. It’s been a long day, I’m tired,
and it’s nearly dusk.

I would welcome suggestions coming from quality AI prompts
Does your comment mean you're not particularly open to considering human suggestions too? Are you unable to give AI quality prompts on your own? You've got me wondering why you posted in this workshop. I did enjoy the poem but am reluctant to post even a basic critique if that's not what you're interested in. Clarify?

Apologies Ella
I meant “also”
Corrected
Gotcha, we do have some members who know how to talk to machines.

I found the poem interesting and amusing. You got me reading up on Donald Tusk.
I enjoyed the rhyme and the monotonous repetition of "themes" and how at the end "tired" is too tired to rhyme.
I like how the first stanza is so drained of enthusiasm for grand themes and then the following stanza opens with its lovely image addressing escapism and ends with the grandest theme, existence.
I particularly like the last three lines as is.

So I personally have no human suggestions for improvement, Hysterical
Thanks for posting it, I hear ya.
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The grand themes - by busker - 8 hours ago
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