Enough

[busker]

When I was a boy
On our farm in Kentucky
I would lay on my back in a field ...the line breaks in these first three lines appear to be at random. The first two lines would be better as one line, or else more thought must be given to the word choices or punctuation

Of tall, golden broomsedge,
Hidden from all the world
Beneath a yellow sun and azure sky  ... 'azure sky' is a cliche. The problematic line breaks continue
Surrounded by warm golden light,  ... warm golden light is also also cliched

With puffs of cloud floating by,  ... as is 'puffs of cloud'
A redtail hawk soaring,
Whistling,
Owning the sky.  ...this is nice
It was enough.
It was enough.  ... there isn't much of a contrast in the poem for this final line to work. You've just described an idyllic day out on the farm, and then declared that it was enough. Of course it was. It was great. Why should that be a surprise? Usually, there also has to be something not so nice, like poverty, or tattered clothes, or merely salt and bread for lunch, or having no friends. Living in a leaky shack. Nothing of the kind is mentioned in the poem, so the conclusion isn't earned.

Hi Bruce - thanks for posting. I think the main thing you might want to consider is how to build towards the last couple of lines.