Because I once loved you there

[matsunosuperfan]

Apologies if I've posted this before, perhaps in a NaPM. It was sitting in my drafts for a long time awaiting rediscovery.

Because I once loved you there

Because I once loved you there
London's precious to me.
The poems written about you there 
were really letters to me.

Love is the only foolish
adventuring we do -
no scraps with a ghostly, ghoulish,
pirate clipper’s crew

are had in life, spent sourly
making bandit barons kings.
Some places keep their pearly 
moon white angels’ wings

because I loved you. Unaware,
like ghosts and ghouls, you’ll haunt me there.

I think it's a decent start but the line is not long enough, and as such the poem is forced to resort to relatively vague, generalized gestures in order to fit the form. Much of the imagery feels received or cliche-adjacent, particularly the final gesture. sourly/pearly is a nice rhyme; the rest aren't very exciting I'm afraid. 

Don't think this wants to be a sonnet <3 The first two lines were the most moving for me. I think tbh that I would much rather hear what the speaker has to say about the particulars of this love than the attempts at universal musing and easy philosophy that follow.