Because I once loved you there

[busker]

It's in Sonnet Practice but never workshopped. I spent some time with it there, enough for it to sound familiar.

Apologies if I've posted this before, perhaps in a NaPM. It was sitting in my drafts for a long time awaiting rediscovery.

Because I once loved you there

Because I once loved you there
London's precious to me.
The poems written about you there 
were really letters to me.
I like the opening, the way a place holds an intimacy long after a personal connection is gone. I also enjoy L3/4, knowing oneself better for writing the poems or turning letters from them into poems. I can't really figure out why you put this into a rhyming form and then used there/there and me/me.

Love is the only foolish
adventuring we do -
I like these lines, adventuring makes me smile.
no scraps with a ghostly, ghoulish,
pirate clipper’s crew

are had in life, spent sourly
making bandit barons kings.
These four lines seem out of place, sometimes life feels like a pirate scrimmage and if it doesn't feel like an adventure can we blame the bandit barons?
Some places keep their pearly 
moon white angels’ wings
moon-white?

because I loved you. Unaware,
like ghosts and ghouls, you’ll haunt me there.
I think you can do better than "like ghosts and ghouls"

This poem has a heart that got to me enough to remember it, I think it needs more effort if you want to keep it in sonnet form or it would do well if you abandon form altogether.

Thanks for the read.

Thanks, Ella. I remembered having written it somewhere, but couldn't find it in my posts. Didn't search the poetry practice threads.
The perils of writing too much.
" This poem ... would do well if you abandon form altogether." is such a polite way of putting the point across   
 
The feedback here has been useful. I liked the ghosts and ghouls circling back at the end, but there's no escaping that it's quite a cliche, and the reader sees it as such. 
That's an important take away.