Eden’s Sky (from a poem by Rich Brown)

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Eden’s Sky 

Edit 1.0 (Bryn)

In Eden,
bodies never age.
Clouds never move
in Eden’s sky, where you and I
won’t change, nor love in time 
grow strange.



Original 

In Eden’s sky,
clouds never move.
Bodies never age
in Eden, where you and I
won’t change, nor love in time 
grow strange.

Rich Brown wrote the piece that inspired this one.
Three lines are straight from it.

I’ve punctuated differently in the first 3 lines, which changes the emphasis slightly  
An experiment 

The RB poem:

https://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-2732...#pid280274