04-28-2026, 05:12 AM
I think that this poem could benefit from some strategic periods. If you would like to accept this, I'd suggest organizing specifically the bottom few lines differently. You certainly have a talent for descriptive imagery but by adding too many words into the picture it makes it harder to follow and instead of the poem sounding mysterious its more so confusing. In all though, this is a lovely poem and I really enjoyed reading it.