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[alonso ramoran]

 

Thank you Alonso for taking the time to read and respond to my poem  

Before I respond to your detailed suggestions I just want to clarify that the I of the poem is not water but the English language personified, that the child play was simply examples of Anglo-Saxon English and my intention was to enact the evolution of the English language? Did you get that or are we at cross purposes?

Enacting the evolution of the english language seems like a tough task. You mean from old english to the way english is spoken today? I didn't get much of that from the poem.

What was the role of the water metaphor in the poem?

Not water so much as river as a metaphor language formation, growth and development.

So the speaker in this poem is the English language? Since the "I" is the English language personified. And how is river working as the main metaphor? Especially if in other sections of the poem the speaker seems to first refer to itself as rainwater runoff and then a lake.