Music and Poetry compositions

[Sullivan]

Were you wanting critique on these as poems or songs or ...?

I'm at odds with this because I'm a musician and until recently 100% of music was made by a tiny percentage of humans that have ever existed, all musicians to some varying degree who have acquired particular skills to be able to make music of some sort. The fact that anyone can now write a prompt and produce a song is very disconcerting for me.

For me a song should be first and foremost about the music and the lyrics no matter how good will always be a secondary factor for judging quality. Good music can easily carry bad lyrics whereas good lyrics can never carry a bad tune to any degree. However not everyone is the same and some people are happy with a generic sounding song.

I'm intrigued as to why you've went with bossa nova style in all your pieces, it doesn't suit the lyrics as such. The tunes are pleasant enough in generic way. It's nice bossa nova but it hasn't really got any flare or passion, it seems to be devoid of emotion and this may also account for why I don't think it suits the lyrics.

I read earlier in the thread that you refuse to divulge your 'prompting technique' but I would be interested to know if you are asking for specific sounding voices or is it just what it is giving you, 'Frank Sinatra sings Bossa Nova'. I think AI responds better to very specific instructions, so have you experimented with asking it in this way?

It is kind of an intriguing concept and I do believe it will be a wonderful tool for some people. Have you ever tried to learn to play a musical instrument? If you were to learn an instrument for 6 months and then wrote to the best of your abilities a song with your lyrics and then performed it I guarantee that I would like it better than the stuff you've posted here simply because of its authenticity. 

You need to find an Elton John to go with you Bernie Taupin. 

If you post these lyrics as a poem in one of the critique forums and then give others critique you will receive critique back, if that is what your looking for, you did mention your "will to improve to be a lyricist".

Cheers for sharing

Hi,
Thanks for those words, I know even with my prompt it feels generic (I never thought of something like "Sinatra sings bossa nova", I just put music genres/styles, warm vocals, mood, etc, nothing very interesting here)

I do compose my own songs with Cubase and WaveLab since 6 years, I signed a contract with an independant music house just 2 years ago, got an OAC YT since december 2025. But here is not to show my musical work. And yeah... this was me in 2021



Maybe you'll want to hear what I compose on my DAWs? A collab song I made with a singer, my latest song, but she was like "I'm hired? Will you pay me?" she literally changed the collab into commissions, that, at the end I accept to pay her upfront, at the only condition she will work with me for a 10 or 12 tracks album in 3 months deadline, but since 3 days after we chatted plans, she left me in front of a blank wall and deserted. Maybe she wasn't satisfied by the fact my label pays each 3 months (because I wanted a long term collab, add her as a secondary artist with my label credentials), or the promise to try myself to make bossa nova (I know nothing of it's theory, but could try by ears) with her singing on those bossa nova songs that could've been, to what I make the best: Industrial music... may have chocked her. I don't know if it scared her she didn't looked under aged, around the 20s, but she said before "I'll work with you asap after I get money for (I don't know), "something"" so she was after fast money. The issue is, I think she gave up, no more replies, no more showing "connected", the dilemna is, I need her consentment to distributate this Industrial with female vocals via my label, so I'm asking to my label if I can at least uploaded it on my OAC YT, presenting how this song was born, mentioning the singer. At least that, I mean, all without bragging she sang very well, I'm finding my way musically more clearly if I get my female vocalist, it boosts my inspiration. And if it's not her, I'll search for another, but I don't want the song I made with her vocals to be lost in the void. The song is like "urban minimalistic Industrial". If you want to listen to it, I could pm you the link to it. Let me know.

(I just received the reply from my label saying even on my OAC YT, it's agaisnt the music industry policies to release or even post something I don't own completely)