03-25-2026, 04:16 AM
Bunx,
Thank you for your comments. I liked your suggestion for the third line, as you can tell
wasellajam,
I was in the process of editing when I saw your post and I was glad to see I seemed to be on the right track as I was adjusting the same lines that you had comments for. I did rearrange some lines, so I'm hoping it flows better. "Rotting" bonsai was also a good catch. Not intentional at all. Thank you for reading!
Thank you for your comments. I liked your suggestion for the third line, as you can tell
wasellajam,
I was in the process of editing when I saw your post and I was glad to see I seemed to be on the right track as I was adjusting the same lines that you had comments for. I did rearrange some lines, so I'm hoping it flows better. "Rotting" bonsai was also a good catch. Not intentional at all. Thank you for reading!