Love - First poem post!

[wasellajam]

Raw emotion unbounded
In it's purest form
Vulnerable in it's nature
A force compelling yet intangible
This certainty at it's peak
I no longer wonder what of the core of my individualism
Free of adversity
As I am ripped open, it pours out of me
But I welcome this with a smile
Drained from my anatomy and soul
I feel no hindrance
No shadow of regret
My feelings in absolution



This poem came to me with a struck of creativity from my actual personal feelings for my lover. Love is so unique that it is untaught but naturally understood. No one is taught how to love someone. There may be examples by already married couples however love comes in so many different forms, routines, and practices. It had to start from somewhere. Sure, sometimes I need validation that I am doing the right thing. Love can possibly take form in negative ways; jealousy, possessiveness, bitterness, etc. However the love that I experience retains a positive undertone, only ever in the best interest for the person my heart beats for. The fact that the feeling can manifest from my nervous system to physical form. A shiver up the spine, a tingle in the pit of my stomach, a skipped beat of my heart, it can seem so surreal. That is how I know this love is true.

Hi, Deeshon. I can see the effort you put in, the breaks are mostly strong and the poem generally reads smoothly.

I have not read your explanation as I want the poem to speak for itself. This is where I'm having a problem because so much of the language is "intangible"   What it the measurement that determines "purest"? You get the idea, go through the poem and see if you can substitute clear language or imagery.

We all need to decide whether or not line capitalization and punctation helps or hurts each particular poem. If you haven't considered it this would be a good time.

Thanks for posting, hope my comments help a bit.