On Repeat (edit)

[wasellajam]

Yes, "crowd" was the point of departure.

The edits are coming along nicely (1.5)  - I particularly like

their colored glass adorns the window sill
to capture early evening’s slanted sun—
Had to chuckle about advice leading to improvements.  If all my ideas were good, think of the poetry I could write !  Ackshully, all it does is make you live with the poem a little longer... yada oyster, yada grit, yada pearl.

Yeah, I'm pretty sure my new opening line will not hold, overdone, but I was done with looking at the old one, multitude, assemblage, collection, ocean with such nice sonics and screwed meter. Good thing I like this stuff.

And I don't use every idea, just the majority of them. And your arrows are on point.