Daily battle

[wasellajam]

I invite any corrections you can add i would love to see a different version of what i made....go crazy....


The word.angel started as a mistake i intended at first to write
..i then thought mmm surely nobody has a better angle than an angel with that supposed birds eye view. So i kept it hidden as a mistake.

Hi, only you can edit your poem into a different version, you can look at suggestions and decide if there are any you'd like to apply. In the Important Threads of the three Critique forums you'll find tips on where to post your poems, how to edit and how to critique at any level, worth a read.

If you're keeping angel you might try

Its like looking at the same picture knowing
We all looking from We're all seeing a different angel

How contractions work: Im=I am=I'm, thats=that is=that's, don't=do not=don't, its=it is=it's, we=we are=we're

Good luck with it.