Daily battle

[fastmarshmallow]

Your analysis I found really helpful....my background is more of a spoken word and orally is where my poem finds its footing.

Im weak on when to add certain things as I had to learn english on my own without a teacher.

I dont even know why I added the poll me being new I thought it was something I was supposed to add. Looks kind of silly now that I think of it.

You write better than a lot of native English speakers my age! Lol.

Agree fully with Ella's comments - it was a fun read but would benefit from a more consistent meter.   

I enjoyed "Barely breathing daily gamble." That's in nice trochaic tetrameter I think. Will need someone to fact check me on that though. Lol.