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Draft 3. The Venusian
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02-26-2026, 03:16 PM
Hi alonso, just briefly to say that for me I think stanza two is now even more awkward to read than before and the loss of 'I dream about in sulfur' is not beneficial to the poem.
Read this a few times now and been meaning to comment, I'll hopefully come back to it. Cheers for the read  wae aye man ye radgie |
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Draft 3. The Venusian - by alonso ramoran - 02-24-2026, 05:18 AM
RE: The Venusian - by dukealien - 02-24-2026, 07:08 AM
RE: Draft 2. The Venusian - by alonso ramoran - 02-26-2026, 11:41 AM
RE: Draft 2. The Venusian - by Magpie - 02-26-2026, 03:16 PM
RE: Draft 2. The Venusian - by dukealien - 02-28-2026, 06:28 AM
RE: Draft 3. The Venusian - by alonso ramoran - 03-03-2026, 04:58 AM
RE: Draft 3. The Venusian - by dukealien - 03-05-2026, 05:58 AM
RE: Draft 3. The Venusian - by dukealien - 03-03-2026, 10:58 AM
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