Short poem

[milo]

Hi, John, for me it reads well and the breaks are sound. As far as ear candy, the language in the opening two lines is lovely, even if the thought is a well used cliche. A few notes:

This is a short poem, as yet untitled. I'm trying to get to grips with rhythm and subtle bits of ear candy. Any comments greatly appreciated. 

Contentment comes not in the catch
but in the breathless chase,
the hope that never dies. I think hope is weak and implied above, maybe use this line to say something interesting about the feeling of the chase.
In how we rise each time we fall,
believing something beautiful Beautiful is sort of null here, what is the N looking for?
lies beyond the next new dawn.

Thanks for posting this, hope this helps. -ella

Thanks Ella. 

I'll now retreat back to the familiar world of prose and songwriting. I quite enjoyed this new experience but realise I haven't grasped the difference between a good and a bad poem, which doesn't auger well for my critiquing activity!

not to get off-topic but sometimes it is better to hear from someone that doesn't know.  It brings a different perspective.  I remember one person I used to discuss poetry with used to spend a lot of time talking about how poetry no longer speaks to the non-poet but concerns itself only with academia.  If that's the case, it is a shame because poetry is really one of the most accessible arts.