a clearing

[Mark A Becker]

Hey Mark,
Enjoyed the poem.  Some great imagery.  My suggestions above were meant to mostly continue the terse observational tone of the poem, but not necessary, necessarily.  You can read through my suggestions and take what you find useful.  I guess the most significant changes came at the end.  I think the strongest theme of the poem is that of stillness, so it seemed right to end on that idea.  Some things to consider!
Take care,
Bryn

Hi Steve-
Thanks for taking the time to make considered comments. I will consider them as I continue to tinker with this one...
Mark