Broke Path
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(01-13-2026, 11:32 AM)Bunx Wrote:  The difference in streets
cracked concrete with dreams unseen
no soles and bruised feet.
If I was extremely picky I would have to say that 'difference' has 3 syllables, which would give the first line 6 syllables, you could drop the 'The' or stick a squiggly thing in diff'rence.

But anyway I'm not extremely picky, so 

nice poem.
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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Broke Path - by Bunx - 01-13-2026, 11:32 AM
RE: Broke Path - by wasellajam - 01-14-2026, 09:49 AM
RE: Broke Path - by Bunx - 01-14-2026, 05:02 PM
RE: Broke Path - by Magpie - 02-02-2026, 09:09 PM
RE: Broke Path - by Bunx - 02-04-2026, 04:42 AM



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