the simple strawmen

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the simple strawmen

we are the simple strawmen
mannequins, the common-common,
the substitute for sweet,
the answer

and yet your middle fattens
and you get cancer … it’s clever till this point 
wanting alabaster

walmart grecian statues made of plaster … the enjambment is also clever, but a little cute 
hollow. Hollow. hollow -
spill your saccharine and follow

the glow, the daytime doctor charmer
take your pills
and wish for somewhere warmer … I think having a punctuation mark here will help. All at once, the poem is losing its clarity and becoming a ramble

sleep.  and if your sleep is haunting
rorschach paper crows then tear them
don't. dress in cast-off clothes and scare them … I’m struggling to follow the line here 

oh simple-simple 
how you fear one thought will break us
or morning light unmake us. … lovely ending 

The simple straw men are not thinking of eyes they dare not meet in death’s dream kingdom, but only of wintering somewhere warmer. 
One problem is that the poetic allusion is over used. 
It’s a clever poem, but lacks the one jaw dropping line. The last one comes close.