Breathless

[milo]

yeah, i get your point i think. I dont really know what to say about the breaks. It lookes fine to me thou. Its a pleaure to discuss and "dissect" the poem. I also read it a couple of times to really appreciate the work.

We have had a lot of great discussions on line breaks right on this site, helpful ella should be along with some links shortly.  I have been an advocate for the power of line breaks

essentially, line breaks in poetry provide extra emphasis and a solid pause for thought.  They should be used on important words, hopefully ones that point to the central metaphor.

Line breaks can be used to:

1. Add meaning and nuance by breaking between a thought and then turning on the break
   
2. Strengthen your central metaphor and build layers of meaning
   
3. add tension and anticipation
   
4. other random effects like whimsy, humour, etc.
   

general consensus is to NOT break on conjunctions, articles or prepositions without good cause (words like and, or, but, the, to, etc)

Should they be to emphasize certain important words and/or where it rhymes?

If you are writing in free verse then, yah, your breaks should fall on important words.

If you are writing in end rhymed verse than you should pick important words for your end rhymes