Wisdom of an apple
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(01-23-2026, 08:34 PM)Smiley Wrote:  
Exercise the dream.
Eat the cupcake filled with cream.
But, too much of the goodies will make you unhealthy and fat.
So savor the moment, remeber that.
An apple is healthy and naturally sweet.
Sugarcoated, what a great treat!

By the way, u know whats worse than to find a worm in your apple? Finding half a worm haha
I do like it quite a bit better with line breaks - don't care much for the centering myself, though I will say it does look a bit like an apple.

Did you notice the meter at all?  It switches from predominantly iambic to predominantly anapestic.
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Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-23-2026, 08:34 PM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by wasellajam - 01-24-2026, 12:28 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 12:31 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 12:35 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 12:38 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by wasellajam - 01-24-2026, 12:43 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 12:50 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by wasellajam - 01-24-2026, 12:54 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 02:36 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 02:59 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 03:05 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by wasellajam - 01-24-2026, 03:11 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 03:16 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 03:19 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 03:26 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 03:32 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 03:46 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by milo - 01-24-2026, 04:38 AM
RE: Wisdom of an apple - by Smiley - 01-24-2026, 04:42 AM



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