01-20-2026, 08:13 AM
(01-15-2026, 10:29 PM)wasellajam Wrote: Fentanyl with Friends (edit 2.5, ray and milo)This is definitely an improvement over versions with "decriminalize" - and I apologize for pointing out the obvious.
One shot of Narcan may not be enough
but two or three might do the magic trick,
administered by cops or fam or friends.
Ohio's welcome center has a box
inserted in the lobby wall that's marked
"Find overdose materials inside."
New laws relieve the fear getting caught,
for 911 reports of overdose
there are no charges, everybody walks.
A father left alone to raise his girls
takes home a bit to ease his nightly blues.
His solitary habit laid him out,
now two more babes are left to family.
To live another day with fentanyl
it's best at least to somewhat socialize.
(any and all crit is gratefully encouraged), previous versions in the ps
but New laws relieve the fear getting caught,
breaks, in my opinion unnecessarily, your otherwise consistent IP. Almost a typo? The easiest fix would be
New laws relieve the fear of getting caught,
but I'd suggest something like
New laws annul all fear of getting caught
or perhaps 'their' in place of 'all' . It's an important line. Or "prosecution" in place of "getting caught," accepting the extra syllable.
Otherwise, it's tight.
Non-practicing atheist

