Fentanyl With Friends (edit) (after dukealien)

[milo]

Milo has tried to help in PM but I can't follow it there, let's try here.

Our laws were changed, they now decriminalize
the call to 911, charges dropped for drug
offense when calling in an overdose

I'm saying:

Our LAWS/ were CHANGED,/ they NOW/ deCRIM/inalIZE/
the CALL/ to NINE/oneone, CHAR/ges DROPPED/ for DRUG/
ofFENSE/ when CALL/ing IN/ an OV/er DOSE./

Calling milo, where am I off? (or anyone else who wants to take a swing.)

say 9-1 -1 a few times, the second 1 definitely gets an accent everytime I have ever heard it. you also have a predominant meter of IP so a reader will always start reading it as IP which the first 3 feet do

That gives us:


theCALL toNINE oneONE CHARGes DROPPEDfor DRUG

The last syllable is called catalexis and it's common enough so - unless I am missing something, it is 6 feet

i realized after reading a few times that you were elliding over decriminalize so it is deCRIM nalLIZE and I can say that fine after a little practice.

Also, I think it might be better dropping "for drug" - the reader knows it is for drug.  Of course, now I am thinking about it too much because I am wondering, "are the charges dropped?  Or are they just not charged"

Oh well, I am confident you will sort it out