Stigma
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(01-09-2026, 10:53 PM)milo Wrote:  
(01-09-2026, 10:08 PM)Bunx Wrote:  I appreciate feedback! I feel like I often post in miscellaneous because my intentions when I start writing are vague at best. Starting with a loose idea. I think the poem is worth tinkering with and work shopping. I started off trying to make a metaphor for stigma that is not super black and white.
So, I think the metaphor is pretty well-drawn on the one side of the equation.  Every metaphor has 2 sides and I don't know if it is as well-drawn:

I see the boxer  - I think you have done a good job drawing out the boxer's journey here.  Are there other places in the poem or wording you could be using to point back to stigma?

Just some thoughts.

Thanks
I've been playing with the idea of doing a part two of the poem that is a little more literal hopefully paralleled with the metaphor original poem. Just an idea
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Messages In This Thread
Stigma - by Bunx - 01-09-2026, 09:46 PM
RE: Stigma - by milo - 01-09-2026, 09:52 PM
RE: Stigma - by Bunx - 01-09-2026, 10:08 PM
RE: Stigma - by milo - 01-09-2026, 10:53 PM
RE: Stigma - by Bunx - 01-19-2026, 05:48 AM
RE: Stigma - by milo - 01-19-2026, 06:00 AM
RE: Stigma - by wasellajam - 01-09-2026, 11:17 PM
RE: Stigma - by Dimitryet - 01-10-2026, 02:07 AM
RE: Stigma - by Bunx - 01-10-2026, 08:12 AM



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