01-19-2026, 12:08 AM
wasellajam dateline='[url=tel:1768747424' Wrote: 1768747424[/url]']Heading over to read through with the changes a couple times
So, I read the linked thread and had the same response I had then, better go check my recent poems. I immediately found two lines which could be improved. Aiming the breaks at the metaphor, theme, point, can only improve the final effect. Good enough reason for line breaks right there.
Also in that thread is a link to a thread on line speed. Unfortunately that thread was a victim of True’s deletion spree so it may look at first glance like milo is talking to himself, but milo was smart enough to quote everything so it’s still readable. Another way to control the read through line breaks.
ha, just tweaked two line breaks in Fentanyl, they may help and I don't think they hurt it, thanks for bringing it up, busker.

