Broke Path
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(01-13-2026, 11:32 AM)Bunx Wrote:  The difference in streets
signals where the hungry are
no soles and bruised feet.

Hi Bunx. I'm liking this. I think the middle line could still use some work, something to get "are" off the break.

signals where the hungry (trod, wait, rest) something
signals where hungry souls (trod, wait, rest) anything you want, that gets rid of both weak words.

So I think you could tweak this a little, looking forward to seeing what you do, if anything. thanks for posting it.
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Broke Path - by Bunx - 01-13-2026, 11:32 AM
RE: Broke Path - by wasellajam - 01-14-2026, 09:49 AM
RE: Broke Path - by Bunx - 01-14-2026, 05:02 PM



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