01-10-2026, 08:31 AM
@dukealien
Thank you so much for commenting, it was making me dizzy and I needed a third (or fourth) eye!
I thought for sure this one was trying too hard- dizains/cleave poem. I tried reading so many things in dactyl hexameter to go for a more Hungarian feel, but I couldn't figure it out and hear the rhythms, and thought whatever this was might be close enough.
Ill definitely change the live stock line and maybe the mock line, this one will have to sit for a bit though, thanks again!
Thank you so much for commenting, it was making me dizzy and I needed a third (or fourth) eye!
I thought for sure this one was trying too hard- dizains/cleave poem. I tried reading so many things in dactyl hexameter to go for a more Hungarian feel, but I couldn't figure it out and hear the rhythms, and thought whatever this was might be close enough.
Ill definitely change the live stock line and maybe the mock line, this one will have to sit for a bit though, thanks again!