01-10-2026, 03:37 AM
(This post was last modified: 01-10-2026, 03:38 AM by Quixilated.)
The rhythm makes me think of Emily Dickinson. Is her favorite first-line pattern the same thing as above, or is it something else?
"I heard a fly buzz when I died," "I started early --- took my dog," "It was not Death, for I stood up," "There is no frigate like a book," "The mushroom is the elf of plants," "A narrow fellow in the grass" ...
It also makes me think of Joyce Kilmer's "Trees"
"I think that I shall never see
a poem as lovely as a tree."
etc.
It seems like your examples have more syllables than these. Is that a necessary element, that it is done in a sonnet line? Or does it count in any form as long as the last four syllables do the dadaDUMDUM bit?
Rhythm is not my forte---trying to make sure I understand what differentiates one thing from another. Thank you, this is a fun topic.
"I heard a fly buzz when I died," "I started early --- took my dog," "It was not Death, for I stood up," "There is no frigate like a book," "The mushroom is the elf of plants," "A narrow fellow in the grass" ...
It also makes me think of Joyce Kilmer's "Trees"
"I think that I shall never see
a poem as lovely as a tree."
etc.
It seems like your examples have more syllables than these. Is that a necessary element, that it is done in a sonnet line? Or does it count in any form as long as the last four syllables do the dadaDUMDUM bit?
Rhythm is not my forte---trying to make sure I understand what differentiates one thing from another. Thank you, this is a fun topic.
The Soufflé isn’t the soufflé; the soufflé is the recipe. --Clara