The pyrrhic/spondee substitution
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(01-08-2026, 09:23 AM)milo Wrote:  
(01-08-2026, 09:11 AM)wasellajam Wrote:  
(01-08-2026, 08:45 AM)milo Wrote:  I saw the red kite flying high in a black sky

So you're saying an occassional line like that might fly? If a poem was full of that it seems I wouldn't notice any set meter at all.
First, you definitely would notice this if it was held continuously because it is almost impossible, I made double subs here because I was practicing my spondees too much, lets see what it looks like and what we can do to fix it:

i SAW the RED KITE flying HIGH ina a BLACK SKY

iamb iamb troche iamb pyrrhic Spondee

So I did get the spondee sub and this would actually be completely acceptable in a line of iambic HEXAMETER but that wasn't the challenge so lets fix it:

One, there are too many feet
Two, there is the trochaic sub that was not part of the challenge

I saw the sparrow fly in a black sky

iSAW theSPAR rowFLY ina BLACK SKY

iamb iamb iamb pyrrhic spondee

Good catch
lol, newbie luck. But thanks for making it so clear.
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Messages In This Thread
The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 02:45 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by busker - 01-08-2026, 04:43 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 04:49 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by busker - 01-08-2026, 06:18 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 08:45 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 09:23 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by wasellajam - 01-08-2026, 09:57 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 09:59 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-08-2026, 08:35 PM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-10-2026, 02:27 AM
RE: The pyrrhic/spondee substitution - by milo - 01-10-2026, 05:04 AM



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