01-08-2026, 09:57 AM
(01-08-2026, 09:23 AM)milo Wrote:lol, newbie luck. But thanks for making it so clear.(01-08-2026, 09:11 AM)wasellajam Wrote:First, you definitely would notice this if it was held continuously because it is almost impossible, I made double subs here because I was practicing my spondees too much, lets see what it looks like and what we can do to fix it:(01-08-2026, 08:45 AM)milo Wrote: I saw the red kite flying high in a black sky
So you're saying an occassional line like that might fly? If a poem was full of that it seems I wouldn't notice any set meter at all.
i SAW the RED KITE flying HIGH ina a BLACK SKY
iamb iamb troche iamb pyrrhic Spondee
So I did get the spondee sub and this would actually be completely acceptable in a line of iambic HEXAMETER but that wasn't the challenge so lets fix it:
One, there are too many feet
Two, there is the trochaic sub that was not part of the challenge
I saw the sparrow fly in a black sky
iSAW theSPAR rowFLY ina BLACK SKY
iamb iamb iamb pyrrhic spondee
Good catch


