Actuality

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Forgot to mention this before (assuming you are still checking back and working on it)

For meter, you have chosen anapestic tetrameter which generally gives poems a frivolous or fun feel.  The subject matter is definitely not frivolous or fun so I wasn't sure whether you wanted to draw a juxtaposition from the meter to the subject matter and if so to what effect.  If not, you may wish to choose a different meter.

Thanks