midnight

[milo]

voices in my head
strangers in the night
is this what it felt like for you all those years ago?
a chance to say goodbye
a chance to leave
a chance to stay

I don't think I would even know how to face you
I couldn't even look you in the eye
what could I say to you 
to make you forgive me

crystal glass and broken promises
silence as tears subside
here I am again
alone, phone a friend, take a cab, sleep it off

hindsight is 20/20
the only regret i have is losing you
i don't know how to let you go.

Hello

It looks like you have a powerful feeling here and are still trying to find the poem.  Many of these phrases are well-worn figurative phrases so where is the payoff for the reader.  Sadly, powerful emotions don't by themselves make for a powerful poem but coupled with some fresh language, some imagery and some metaphors they certainly can.  

Really, the hard part is behind you.  you have something you want to write about, to speak to, now how can we spruce it up to make it a little more interesting?

Thanks