The Misfire

[thewilderhen]

I interpret it as a disconnect between what the speaker knows emotionally and what institutions can articulate. There's no way to convey emotions and stories to academic or medical frameworks without losing meaning. May I ask what your intended meaning was?

Not sure of the larger meaning, though your interpretation gives me fuel to help revise. Thank you!

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It's an engaging bit of story telling, with the line pauses at the right points.
The 'war zone' is interesting. The dough men interpret a problem according to their own experience. They can't imagine it on someone else's terms.
It's not just men/women - the wider interpretation is group A / group B, or even self / others.

I would like to know more about the specifics of the work (blue book / unknown) and the perhaps lesbian lover, but it's not essential.
Excellent poem.

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With an apt title - dough men / misdiagnosis

Thanks! It’s part of a larger narrative-poem, I was stuck on this part and wanted to free write and post it to gauge how “too weird” it was. Your interpretation gives me some directions to consider when revising - still not sure about line breaks in general… I will have to beg a kind soul for a tutorial on some other appropriate place on this forum