Winter Ballad

[Mostly Holy]

What a lovely poem! I think you have nailed the meter, tho I tend to want to read "A melody so true." as two iambs followed by a Pyrrhic, or a soft iamb, "ME-lo-DY" naturally carries two heavy stresses I think, and if you wanted to make it firmly iambic trimeter, perhaps you could swap "true" for a word that ends on a mute, to force a heavier stress there?