Inside a Day

[dukealien]

How about:

Was not a loss, I find.

Thank you . I decided to alter the final stanza completely and made other revisions. 


I lost the day inside a dream
The dream inside a day
I lost the hours in a glass
The sands had passed away

I ask the stars to teach me
"To where the day has gone ?"
Seven sisters answered
Dancing all along

I begged the moon for wisdom
Surely she would answer fair
Waning in her brilliance;
had little light to share

The night I lost to wonder
In heavens celestial tease
Day broken into memories
My worries lost to ease

Substantial improvements, I think.  I'm again a bit concerned about possible forced rhyme ("tease") in the final stanza and - a minor point - I believe it should be "Heaven's" (possessive) or at least "heavens' " (plural and possessive).  Inclusion of some punctuation does help.  And (now you're using it) a comma - or em dash - after "wisdom" in S3 would help the reader sustain the rhythm.

Coming along nicely.