Sonnet challenge crndlsm, mostly Holy, cryptcreeper

[TheCryptCreeper]

Hey both, I have my second submission ready!
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-- Original Version --

“We can't change what’s passed, we're cursed if not blessed”,
Spelled out in perfect script, below the art.
My jaw is clenched as rubies cut through my chest,
And gemstones gleam from my body in parts.

A cruel claymore glints in a scene so bright,
In spotlight’s glow, a sharp and violent streak.
Attached to righteous knight, clad in white light,
As sapphire tears stain my radiant cheek.

I am one trophy in a hall of grand
Meaningful events to commemorate.
In the victor’s painted window I stand,
Above the words to celebrate my fate.

Frozen in pane, by me the long years pass.
My last moment in pain, a King of glass.
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Mirages of life to glimpse as a ghost
History hums, but I like now the best.
Each of us living lives, no "King" can boast
We can't change whats passed, we're cursed if not blessed

My last moment in pain, a King of glass.

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Fine work so-far guys, let's keep it up!!

Edit: Looks like I didn't see the discussions on the second page lol; I thought the idea was to do ABAB CDCD EFEF GG for the final sonnet
Edit 2: Holy has asked for some changes to the final line to better fit the final sonnet with her next sonnet so I have made some changes:
-- Revised Version --

“We can't change what’s passed, we're cursed if not blessed”,
Spelled out in perfect script underneath art.
Fractured rubies spilling out from my chest,
Gemstones gleam from my corrupt impaled heart.

The cruel claymore glints in a scene so bright,
In spotlight’s glow, a sharp and violent streak.
In hands of righteous knight, clad in white light,
A sapphire tear stains my reflective cheek.

My emerald eyes fall upon the land,
To be claimed by another was its fate,
My gaze glazed over in window so grand,
Above a small quote to commemorate—

My fragile reign of a Kingdom of glass,
All that remains are fragments of the past.
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Mirages of life to glimpse as a ghost
History hums, but I like now the best.
Each of us living lives, no "King" can boast
We can't change whats passed, we're cursed if not blessed

All that remains are fragments of the past.