Unwanted Gifts (CW: Language)

[jeffalot]

Thanks for sharing this poem; I liked it and I didn't have the feeling it was self-absorbed like you mentioned. The rhyme doesn't seem overdone or forced to me. Maybe only the last stanza here/hear rhyme, as well as the repetition of the hear/here sound three times in the stanza is a bit much perhaps? I like the idea of 'deep-hoarded shame' - shame hidden deep inside, but also has a sense of it being an involuntary action, like a hoarder. 'Poorly fused brain' is great and very evocative.