Inside a Day

[dukealien]

I lost the day inside a dream
The dream inside a day
I lost the hours in a glass  suggests you got drunk
The sands all passed away  but it was an hourglass - nice turn.

I ask the stars to help me
To where the day has gone
Seven sisters answered me  is "me" necessary here?
Dancing all along

I begged the moon for wisdom
Surely it would answer fair reader must be prepared to read these two lines as one, for rhythm
Waning in its brilliance to parallel that rhythm, perhaps an added beat at the end of this line - 'her ... she'
Had little light to share

The night I lost to wonder
Was not a loss in kind  not quite getting what "kind" means here
Day broken into pieces
Gathered by my mind

This is quite nice.  The basic meter is iambic, but you do not fear to vary line lengths in a pleasing way.  Complete absence of punctuation serves well:  the reader must puzzle out stresses and the associated phrasing, unaided by sentence structure (including capitalization).  Done consistently, this works.

My detail criticisms are interlinear above.  The last concerns me a little - there's a suspicion "kind" was chosen almost entirely to match your ABCB rhyme scheme.  I may be mistaken about that, and even if so, it shows either forward-looking word choice (good) or willingness to look back while writing instead of getting locked in (also good).  You avoid being trapped by ABAB rhyme scheme, also a plus.

The story told here seems a little diffuse, but that's fine:  it relates to dreams and mental processes, which are.