11-15-2025, 09:29 PM
We rose above
They need no god,
They surpassed him,
They heed no warning,
They are the danger.
When religion is abandoned,
What do we cling to?
Our twisted
Moral misdirection,
Our hollowed-out judgement.
How could we rise above—
Believe,
When most don’t believe
In themselves,
When the self is a shade,
Gouged by dubiety.
Faith may show no proof,
It offers a path
We refuse to pace.
The world twisted,
Becoming estranged,
A hive for the untethered,
The perilous,
The pagans.
It's free verse. but it's mostly if it feels complete, as in, does it hold its value, are the layers deep enough? wording, rephrasing needed?
Thanks in advance.
They need no god,
They surpassed him,
They heed no warning,
They are the danger.
When religion is abandoned,
What do we cling to?
Our twisted
Moral misdirection,
Our hollowed-out judgement.
How could we rise above—
Believe,
When most don’t believe
In themselves,
When the self is a shade,
Gouged by dubiety.
Faith may show no proof,
It offers a path
We refuse to pace.
The world twisted,
Becoming estranged,
A hive for the untethered,
The perilous,
The pagans.
It's free verse. but it's mostly if it feels complete, as in, does it hold its value, are the layers deep enough? wording, rephrasing needed?
Thanks in advance.
I know that rhyme, rhythm, and meter are not academically standardized.
I am well aware of that, yet I primarily do free verse, and it's based on instinctual writing.
I try to avoid academic language or structure. My poems are not meant to convey a single answer.
I try to convey the unknown through minimalism, mostly dense short stanzas with many line breaks.
If you'd give a critique, please keep this in mind.
I am well aware of that, yet I primarily do free verse, and it's based on instinctual writing.
I try to avoid academic language or structure. My poems are not meant to convey a single answer.
I try to convey the unknown through minimalism, mostly dense short stanzas with many line breaks.
If you'd give a critique, please keep this in mind.