11-08-2025, 10:15 PM
First of all, it takes a tremendous amount of courage to out your work out there lie this. Notice I said the word "work". As much as poetry is an art and an expression, it takes work, as mentioned in the other comments. Keep at it. Work at it. Have fun with it. Get bored of it. Get frustrated with it. Then love it all over again. Develop your voice then scream it to the open air.
Whether you have an instinct or not, only you can tell. With everything in life, talent will only take you so far, hard work takes you the rest of the way.
As for this piece, I think you're on to something. You have a good idea of pacing and sound and stayed with a structured rhyming scheme without compromising your message too much. You seem to understand imagery and poet language, so you seem to have a good foundation to build on.
As I said, and the other comments too, keep writing, keep working, and keep growing.
Great work and thanks for sharing
Whether you have an instinct or not, only you can tell. With everything in life, talent will only take you so far, hard work takes you the rest of the way.
As for this piece, I think you're on to something. You have a good idea of pacing and sound and stayed with a structured rhyming scheme without compromising your message too much. You seem to understand imagery and poet language, so you seem to have a good foundation to build on.
As I said, and the other comments too, keep writing, keep working, and keep growing.
Great work and thanks for sharing
Move within,
but don’t move the way fear makes you move.
-Rumi
but don’t move the way fear makes you move.
-Rumi