To You who hold the Key

[whisperer]

This is beautiful and painful and suspenseful and hopeful all at the same time. Your word choices and pacing stir up so much emotion. Great use of line breaks and the hyphens mid line........perfect. The only thing I would touch up on is the use, and sometimes over use, of olde English, or Victorian, language. It does add to the piece, but I think you're talented enough to find words to convey the same emotions without relying on something so cliche. Other than that, this is well written and very well expressed. I will be reading this one over a few more times, for sure. Thanks for sharing