Dear Diary

[whisperer]

I think this reads well as it is. Maybe add more natural punctuation, mostly for the overall look of the piece, so it looks more like natural prose or a natural diary entry.

I love this little section;

and there i was
something like a three foot kid
tugging on strangers clothes
lost in a labyrinth of legs
looking for a mother in the crowd
stopping to stare at one or another passing by
a mother i could not pick
the fabric i dare not wear

It's magical and whimsical and a little frightening to have that freedom but to be alone in it. I think you've captured that nicely. You've shown some poetic prowess here and its a little break from the language used in the rest of the piece. Maybe highlight this more by sectioning it off as a separate stanza, or in italics (that's for you to play around with).

I wouldn't worry too much about line breaks as much as I would focus on allowing your true poetic voice speak out in your work. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing.