October Taps - edit

[whisperer]

I think I went a little deeper and philosophical on this piece. The love and attention we think we need from others, we should be finding in ourselves. Hence why your little house finch is so attracted to it's own reflection, whether it knows it is their reflection or not. A great symbolism. My only concern is with lines 1 and 2 of your second stanza. You provide an option between fiend and mate, but not with envied rival. I'm not sure it this was intentional to sound more poetic, but I feel that if you dropped the "friend" and moved the "or" to before the next subject.

example:
Does she seek friend or mate,
to thrash an envied rival?

Does she seek a mate,
or to thrash an envied rival?

Aside from that, it's a cute little piece with a deeper personal message. Well done and thank you for sharing this.