10-24-2025, 12:19 AM
I love this metaphor, and it makes a lot of sense especially if you want your poems to be understood.
I do somewhat disagree though about the 50/50 60/40 recommendation.
I believe that if the clouds are heavy enough, the reader will feel the dew on their skin or maybe their soul will even get drenched with rain. That is if the reader is the target, if the clouds are overhead the reader, they will feel its impact no matter what. If the reader can only see the clouds from afar, they likely lack the life experience that will bring them understanding and they will be the ones who require an anchor to facilitate that.
That said, to reach a wider audience 50/50 is probably ideal. But I think that poems where the clouds whose rain acts as its own anchor weighing down the readers situated underneath are the most deeply felt poems. But those ones are reserved for those underneath who are able to feel the rain.
I do somewhat disagree though about the 50/50 60/40 recommendation.
I believe that if the clouds are heavy enough, the reader will feel the dew on their skin or maybe their soul will even get drenched with rain. That is if the reader is the target, if the clouds are overhead the reader, they will feel its impact no matter what. If the reader can only see the clouds from afar, they likely lack the life experience that will bring them understanding and they will be the ones who require an anchor to facilitate that.
That said, to reach a wider audience 50/50 is probably ideal. But I think that poems where the clouds whose rain acts as its own anchor weighing down the readers situated underneath are the most deeply felt poems. But those ones are reserved for those underneath who are able to feel the rain.